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My Online Fantasy Boy (16)

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5 May 11, 10:32 PM
will_ingtoplease
UK(LN), 3 yrs

With respect

will change my original thought

think he has missed out

He has most definitely Missed out,

,hope you hang on to those toys , and hope some one gets to play with them WOW .

7 May 11, 12:47 AM
HarmCandy
UK, 4 yrs

Corkers! It wasn't me was it?

TheMistressH wrote:
But I know that many Ladies think he is hot, so he will be just fine!

'Above, it isn't bright. Below, it isn't dark.'

7 May 11, 2:37 PM
Mistress_Shy
UK(DE), 3 yrs
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TheMistressH wrote:

MizzScarlett wrote:

TheMistressH wrote:
Yes, sadly they are true words.

But if something isn't meant to be, perhaps it is better if it doesn't progress any further than nice dreams.

If he had been right for me, then he would be at my feet now, having a lovely time!!

Mistress H

Some things are only met to be what they are.

Having said that, he might read your words and ....

Thank you! I think if he reads this, he will probably think "Phew! lucky escape!"

I know there are other Ladies who he is communicating with in the same way, and they are probably doing the same as him, having safe, online fun.

I think he just got scared, and had no intention of allowing it to progress..in spite of all the times of saying he wanted to be my Boy, etc.

But I know that many Ladies think he is hot, so he will be just fine!

Mistress H

What a beautiful piece and written with such feeling....

You Really are a Special person, what a shame that everyone is not as honest and caring as you are......

8 May 11, 9:12 PM
The_MVM
UK(ST), 3 yrs

Well done MH good words truly said. The boy will soon cool down in the eyes of others when he hides behind his screen and coffee cups.

There are only so many words you can hear before there needs to be flesh to the dream.

Cruelty is like hope: it springs eternal
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10 May 11, 12:00 AM
Arry_le_Switch
UK(WF), 11 yrs

Impressive poem there MH - your use of half rhyme intensifies the "so near and so far" tone, as does the rhythmic parallelism of "manoevers/adventures" and "promising/flattering". Lovely assonance in the line endings "true/boots" which is a great way to take the poem forward to its conclusion, and also to emphasise the reality of those boots as opposed to the fantasy objects. And once that reality is established, the reader is set up for the killer line "On your knees...in your dreams", where again, assonance links the knees and the dreams, but the opposed prepositions whisk the kneeling back into the unrealised world of the entirely notional.

Full rhyme is only used internally ("You said you'd be my Pet..and yet") and for the description of the addressee's actions within his own ambit ("operation/nation" "back/attack"), ensuring that his professional confidence is brought into sharp relief with his perceived failure of nerve...

Edited 10 May 11, 12:01 AM by Arry_le_Switch

10 May 11, 9:31 AM
TheMistressH
UK(HX), 4 yrs

Precisely.

Thank you 'arry.

Always inebriated by the exuberance of your verbocity.

Glad you think I done good.

Mistress H

Edited 10 May 11, 9:33 AM by TheMistressH