| 26 Oct 10, 12:41 PM Goldilocks UK(SE), 5 yrs  |
I'm just going to stand in line with all the others and proclaim that I loved this story. The scenario was brilliant. I loved your writing style. I really got into the story although it was a little too short for me 
I would love it if you used your talent again to either write more to this particular story or write longer, more drawn out ones in future Very good and thank you for sharing! Well done!! Oh and the best part of this story was that I honestly felt like the girl was me. I sit and watch the bags in clubs whilst my friends dance. I don't dress up as much. I sit on my own. I talk in queues if people talk to me. The whole shebang. It just made the story *that* much hotter <3 <3 <3 Goldie | |||
| 26 Oct 10, 1:01 PM MidNightJustice UK(TF), 22 mths  |
i completely agree it flows well and for a first time write is brillant you set the secene well it flowed nicely and there detail possible i little more would be nice but im nit picking its a great set up and im very much looking forward to the next installment keep it up hun your doing great 
Edited 26 Oct 10, 1:02 PM by MidNightJustice | |||
| 26 Oct 10, 2:34 PM Drew_Heller UK(LS), 4 yrs  |
Bloody loved it! Keep writing! I want part two!!! | |||
| 27 Oct 10, 10:45 AM River_Deep UK, 6 yrs |
Not a bad crack at it luv It is not what you say or do but the way you say or do it | |||
| 27 Oct 10, 12:14 PM kinkymermaid UK(UB), 3 yrs |
brilliant, please keep on..... | |||
| 28 Oct 10, 1:45 AM Monkey_Wench UK(B), 20 mths    |
I enjoyed it, a lot. You have obviously put a lot of thought into the characterisation of your 'victim', this was believeable, and allowed me to identify with her as a person. You MUST write more! Alls x 'Carve your name into my arm. Instead of stressed, I lie here charmed.' | |||
| 1 Nov 10, 11:14 AM FairyGirl UK(YO), 3 yrs   |
I'm with this girl. Not that I tend to be the bag watcher, but I always tend to be the one who's not pulled and is sort of sidelined... Not to mention over-eager to talk to anyone who shows an interest in talking to me "Nothing saves anyone's life, Sir. It just postpones their death." - Posner , The History Boys. |
Just so I have more porn to read 
